Friday, September 12, 2008

Koffie

Koffie
tan , swirl
buzzing, talking, laughing,
creams, syrups, agitates, ice
Freezing, blending,
wet,translucent,
water


 Thursday, Sept. 11,2008

12 comments:

anthonynorth said...

A very lively description there.
I liked it.

keithsramblings said...

I love it! Summed it up perfectly.

Granny Smith said...

That's the way my iced coffee ends up - bits of ice then water. Is that what you intended? I like the visual shaping of this verse.

Devil Mood said...

Hmm yummy!
I can feel the froth coming up :)

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

Hi Lela,

Well, there's me Rose and Dewy Knickers and Bawdy Wench are alter egos of me. I'm a multiple personality within Brian who is a man and there are a total of six personalities including him and four other males. I'm the only female so I provide the common sense and intelligence. ;)

Rose

xo

totomai said...

i tried reading it backwards. and its still a great poem!

naturalbookcraft said...

Thank-you most kindly for your words! I love what you've done with the spelling and multiple adjectives for the scribbling! Very creative and very fun! both your comment and your poem has brought a smile to the end of my (ugh) working day.

peace, life & love!

Namaste.

Rinkly Rimes said...

Vivid adjectives! And I love it when the written word makes a pleasing design on a page.

Linda Jacobs said...

Is this a diamante? Seems like I've seen this form before.

Excellent job!

tumblewords said...

Sounds good to me! Nice poetry...

Rambler said...

definitely talking :)

texasblu said...

What is this form? It's on the tip of my tongue... it's a wonderful description. :)